THE GALASHIAN -By Aaron & Nikola

The Galashian pounds through the plains of Pandora, invincible armour,teeth sharper than knives.She ducks as a Grapla swoops above.Suddenly her back legs bolts against bone as the Grapla was soon history. The Galashian roams around suspecting an unlucky victim to fill his appetite.

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3 Responses to THE GALASHIAN -By Aaron & Nikola

  1. Mr W. says:

    Nicely used simile.
    I like the way ‘pounds’ creates the image of something large too – like a rhino for example.

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  2. Francesca says:

    I like the way you finish with the threat of it roaming and hungry. Great writing.

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  3. Chris says:

    Hi,
    I’m Chris.
    I like the way that you used “the grapla is history.” The text. Is very descriptive by using pounding, invincible, armour and the simile ‘teeth like knifes’. It’s so descriptive, I felt like I was there!

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