Viper Cow by Eva.T and Olaf

This ferocious creature romes around Pandora.  Its eyes glow in the moonlight. Every night, this creature goes to hunt.  His long black tail is used as a whip to catch the pray. His comb like teeth then sinks into the boddie of  the victim, blood surrounding it. You can see the bits of the animal stuck inside the viper cows teeth; he may still be  going around the woods now, beware…..

 

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6 Responses to Viper Cow by Eva.T and Olaf

  1. Aksa says:

    I liked the way that you used lots of interesting vocabulary to create a picture in the reader’s mind.

    Next time you could try to check your punctuation and spelling.

    What is the name of the creature that you are writing about?

  2. Miss D says:

    I love the word ‘beware’ at the end, it shows super reader awareness.

  3. Rosa says:

    Your writing attracts the reader. Because this writing was so descriptive, I felt scared. The word beware makes me emotional. You have used so many good volcabulary and puntuation. You should have checked your spellings and puntuations before you post it but it was still good.

  4. Sally says:

    I think you had describe the ‘viper cow’ very clearly and this writing makes me feel scary! Also, I think this story is very descriptive.

  5. Eva says:

    I really enjoyed writing this blog post because we both tried our hardest to make it the best we could .

  6. Joe O'H says:

    I love that cliff hanger,very interesting.Was the Viper cow on one of the sheets?

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