Pandora by Connor and Niamh

As the majestic land woke up, the trees stack up like lego. The grass covered the mountains as if it was giving it a hug. The tranquil spectatored the rippleing river.Silky and smooth leaves will clutch onto you.The tree is a horde of evil waiting for its prey. Beware of pandora..

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2 Responses to Pandora by Connor and Niamh

  1. Joseph H says:

    Very good but you just forgot your……………….TITLE!

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  2. Alison says:

    What a great description Connor and Niamh , I enjoyed the mix of metaphor and simile and particularly liked the idea of the grass hugging the mountain. Perhaps you could think about changing your sentence order, so you avoided starting with “The.” For example, “As if it was giving it a hug, the grass covered the mountain.” Lovely ideas, keep going!

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